NEW COLLABORATIVE POEM - HAVE A GO

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OK those who showed interest - the suggestion is that each person write a 4 line verse of 12 syllables using the rhyming scheme of AABB - that's pretty basic and simple and well within everyone's capabilities, and let us see where we go with it.

Using Lynnes suggestion for the first line - the poem is untitled as that will reveal itself as we go along. I am happy to tweak if needed as long as no one is going to have a hissy fit about it, and the idea is to copy and paste all the verses written prior to adding your own verse on - that way people don't have to read through every post to see the poems progress.

So away you go - I've added in the first verse below.


Each line has 12 syllables and the rhyming scheme is a simple AA BB

Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.

mkc

So working on the basis of this formula - should allow everyone to come up with something without too much difficulty.

OK away you go and let's see where we end up. Please copy and paste the previous verses before adding your own and add your initials/nom de plume at the end of your verse.
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Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.

mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
Can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour

dw
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Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
Can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

But when the meal is over with cigars all around
the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
their menfolk will tell stories of dubious taste
about gorgeous women whom they claim to have chased.
pg

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It's looking good folks - keep it rolling .... =D=

Each line has 12 syllables and the rhyming scheme is a simple AA BB ... copy and paste the previous verses before adding your own.


Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
Can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

But when the meal is over with cigars all around
the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
their menfolk will tell stories of dubious taste
about gorgeous women whom they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was expanded - there was room now to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc
The Scribbly Bark Poet
see some scribbles here - http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/

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Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
Can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

But when the meal is over with cigars all around
the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
their menfolk will tell stories of dubious taste
about gorgeous women whom they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was expanded - there was room now to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

Fresh and pristine the ingredients might be, but not
the gorgeous Maisie who worked at her cooking pot.
She made dollars while involved in that cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc
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:oops 14 syllables in that first line Dreamy ..... how about tweaking it to read

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been

By tweaking this you can also see that the stresses on the words continue to fall in the right places ( on the 3rd syllable ) which moves the verse along at the same pace - a 'canter' as it were ... if you read aloud these become more obvious
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So doing a little fine tuning along the way we now have this .....

Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw
The Scribbly Bark Poet
see some scribbles here - http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/

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So pleased you are now talking of stressed and unstressed syllables, Mahalia. I have never liked the dependence on just syllable numbers, but did try to conform. Thanks for your good overview and editing!
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Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw

A scullery maid of African extraction
was taken on by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg

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Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc

A scullery maid of African extraction
was taken on by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg


She said to the cook, "I will wash all the dishes,
and wait on the men should that be your wishes."
The cook answered "Right, you can serve them their coffees,
And offer them some of these caramel toffees."
dw
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Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

O yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc

A scullery maid of African extraction
was taken on by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg


She said to the cook, "I will wash all the dishes,
and wait on the men should that be your wishes."
The cook answered "Right, you can serve them their coffees,
And offer them some of these caramel toffees."
dw

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Each line has 12 syllables and the rhyming scheme is a simple AA BB ... copy and paste the previous verses before adding your own.





Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

Oh yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc

A scullery maid of African extraction
was employed by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg


She said to the cook, "I will wash all the dishes,
and wait on the men if that should be your wishes."
The cook answered "Right, you can serve them their coffees,
And offer them some of these caramel toffees."
dw

The scullery maid and our Maisie had issues
it all came to tears and then out came the tissues.
What started the squabble? What caused them to quibble?
Aisha the maid had a penchant for tipple. :eek
mkc
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Each line has 12 syllables and the rhyming scheme is a simple AA BB ... copy and paste the previous verses before adding your own.


Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

Oh yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc

A scullery maid of African extraction
was employed by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg

She said to the cook, "I will wash all the dishes,
and wait on the men if that should be your wishes."
The cook answered "Right, you can serve them their coffees,
And offer them some of these caramel toffees."
dw

The scullery maid and our Maisie had issues
it all came to tears and then out came the tissues.
What started the squabble? What caused them to quibble?
Aisha the maid had a penchant for tipple. :eek
mkc

Aisha was so angry she was glowing red,
she’d be made to look stupid for something she’d said.
Her English was too scrappy to argue her point
and now all she wanted was to burn down the joint.
pg

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Each line has 12 syllables and the rhyming scheme is a simple AA BB ... copy and paste the previous verses before adding your own.


Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

Oh yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc

A scullery maid of African extraction
was employed by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg

She said to the cook, "I will wash all the dishes,
and wait on the men if that should be your wishes."
The cook answered "Right, you can serve them their coffees,
And offer them some of these caramel toffees."
dw

The scullery maid and our Maisie had issues
it all came to tears and then out came the tissues.
What started the squabble? What caused them to quibble?
Aisha the maid had a penchant for tipple.
mkc

Aisha was so angry she was glowing red,
she’d be made to look stupid for something she’d said.
Her English was too scrappy to argue her point
and now all she wanted was to burn down the joint.
pg

They needed an inflow of cash in a hurry
if to remain open, and serving up curry.
A change of direction was desperately needed
they must work together - fights progress impeded

They needed the cash that a big 'cook off' offered
and took up the challenge with all ideas proffered
they cooked up a dish de cour - flavoursome to eat
and served it silver service to make it complete.
mkc
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Each line has 12 syllables and the rhyming scheme is a simple AA BB ... copy and paste the previous verses before adding your own.


Do we have any takers?' she asked with a sigh
and a roll of her eyes that suggested that my
suggestion was quite worthless and really quite dumb
but the proof of the pudding's in eating old chum.
mkc

Oh yes there are takers, there's no need to worry.
And can Yorkshire pudding be served with a curry?
I'll eat it with my chum if there's enough flavour
and curry is what I'm now happy to savour
dw

When the meal is over with cigars all around
all the ladies retiring, not making a sound,
as their menfolk tell stories of dubious taste
about the gorgeous women they claim to have chased.
pg

The plot was now expanded - there was room to move
and with Covid the world was in a cooking groove,
with ingredients delivered fresh and pristine
there were dollars to be made on the cooking scene
mkc

the ingredients might be quite pristine and fresh,
unlike Maisie the gorgeous whose jiggling flesh
earned big dollars pot stirring on the cooking scene
to please menfolk in whose company she had been
dw/mkc

A scullery maid of African extraction
was employed by the cook and pressed into action.
Her English was lacking, and so was her eyesight,
but for all of that she was extremely polite.
pg

She said to the cook, "I will wash all the dishes,
and wait on the men if that should be your wishes."
The cook answered "Right, you can serve them their coffees,
And offer them some of these caramel toffees."
dw

The scullery maid and our Maisie had issues
it all came to tears and then out came the tissues.
What started the squabble? What caused them to quibble?
Aisha the maid had a penchant for tipple.
mkc

Aisha was so angry she was glowing red,
she’d be made to look stupid for something she’d said.
Her English was too scrappy to argue her point
and now all she wanted was to burn down the joint.
pg

They needed an inflow of cash in a hurry
if to remain open, and serving up curry.
A change of direction was desperately needed
they must work together - fights progress impeded

They needed the cash that a big 'cook off' offered
and took up the challenge with all ideas proffered
they cooked up a dish de cour - flavoursome to eat
and served it silver service to make it complete.
mkc

The kitchen staff, though each at odds with the others,
combined and produced, with advice from their mothers,
molasses-glazed black bass with a coconut salad.
They'd first trialed it and tasted, ending up palid.
dw
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